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Great Name: Better Player
http://lastwordonhockey.com/2016/10/27/ryan-dzingel-great-name-better-player/
Please hire me; as your editor. I will work for free (or even pay) you
1. That sentence should not start with "And". Some sentences can, but not that one.
2. Put a period after your brackets!
3. Semi-colons; do not work that way
4. How can three players be two-thirds of a top line?
5. So many commas!
I had to do this. Other than that, its a neat little article. Not much new for the fans here but its nice to see some appreciation for Dizzy good start.
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