Skipping around a little bit because I feel like doing this one next. I'll get to every team in my division before the end though.
Coaching and Leadership
Sather is one of the best run-and-gun coaches out there. This isn't really a run-and-gun team past the first line, but nonetheless, he's a coach well equipped to get the most out of Jaromir Jagr and let him do his thing. Leaders are okay, none of them scream all-time great captains, but they are all pretty solid. Personally, I'd make Pronger the C, but I guess you're worried that you might get "bad Pronger." I like Larry Robinson as an assistant in charge of the defense - he'll make you much more likely you'll get "good Pronger." Robinson also makes me a lot more comfortable with the idea of "wild thing" Iafrate in the lineup.
Forwards
Jagr is an awesome offensive force, but he's high maintenance, and he really can only play one style at a high level - a offensive-minded European puck possession style, where Jagr himself is the focal point. This line works. Crosby, as a superstar in the real NHL is usually the one controlling the play, but he is a smart player, decent away from the puck, and very good in front of the net, so I think he'll work well off the puck, as Jagr does his thing with it. It's always hard to evaluate still-active players, but I think Crosby has accomplished enough to be a decent 1st line center in this - I would not like him as the catalyst of a top line at this level, but he's perfectly fine as the 2nd best member of the line. From a talent perspective, Shutt is a weak 1st liner, but he works perfectly from a fit perspective - this line working similarly to how the Shutt-Lemaire-Lafleur line worked in real life (with Crosby a big offensive upgrade from Lemaire and something of a defensive downgrade). Shutt has experience playing off the puck and going to the net himself. Also, I don't know if you did this on purpose, but back to Jagr being high maintenance, I think it's good that you got another Czech speaker in Tikal in your starting lineup - that should help keep Jagr happy.
2/3 of an awesome second line. Again, another line built around a winger, with the fast and fiery Firsov being a very strong 2nd line catalyst. Sittler is kind of a jack-of-all-trades-master-of-none and fits as a complimentary 2nd line C. I'm not a fan of Gare on a second line at 28 teams - he brings toughness to your top 6 and something of a goal scoring touch, but as an overall offensive player, he was nothing special outside of his career season. As an even strength scorer, he wasn't much different from Don Luce and Craig Ramsey over the course of his career. I'm also not sure of the fit - does Gare have the speed to keep up with Firsov? Do his linemates have the playmaking abilities to set him up and make him offensively useful?
Strong two-way third line built around Lemaire (a truly elite 3rd line center at even strength), with Bobby Rousseau the two-way playmaker from the wing Lemaire can use. Tremblay is okay as a third line LW - he has all the skills you'd want (speed, grit, decent two-way ability); I just never think of him as a top 3rd liner though... maybe his injuries, I don't know. I guess if I had a criticism of the line, it's that you could have used more grit next to Rousseau's softness, but overall it's a pretty strong third line for an offensive-minded team.
Primeau is a 4th liner with size who can kill penalties competently. Dineen can chip in scoring. I had MacKell before and as far as I could tell, he was only a LW for a few years and was basically a grinder, so don't expect much from him at LW. I understand why you'd put him at LW though - gives you another guy who can take faceoffs on the PK.
Neither Yashin or Buff brings any defensive ability, so you could get in trouble if someone in your bottom 6 is injured.
Overall, a good, offensive minded bunch with defensive ability sprinkled throughout the lineup. I like the Crosby-Jagr, Sittler-Firsov, and Lemaire-Rousseau duos. The third wheels of each line aren't as strong, though Tremblay isn't exactly bad as the 3rd best member of a 3rd line.
Defense
Pronger is a solid #1, very physical, good both ways, somewhat injury prone. I find his value to be higher on special teams than at even strength, where he is probably somewhat below average. Larry Robinson's presence behind the bench should hopefully minimize bad penalties. Suchy is a good puck moving #2 who wasn't bad in his own zone. Suchy peaked against somewhat weak European competition in the late 60s/early 70s, so I always preferred him as a 2nd pairing puck mover to a first pairing guy who sees the best competition here, even if I think he has the talent to be a #2. Still, his skating-based two-way game should be a good fit net to Pronger.
I think you drafted Desjardins just a bit early, but nonetheless, he's a good third pairing anchor and a solid two-way #3. I think Weber could pass for a #3, which makes him an above average #4, and his physical game compliments Desjardins' more cerebral game very well.
Overall, a really well balanced top 4 - nothing really stands out as awe-inspiring, but they get the job done.
Tikal is something of a mystery man - can you make the case for him as a #5?Pelletier says "Father David Bauer, the legendary Canadian national team coach of the 1960s, considered Tikal the best defensman in Europe in the 1960s." I wish Joe cited his sources, I would want to know when Father David Bauer said that and if he was knowingly comparing Tikal to Ragulin. Skillset-wise, he reads like a pretty tough stay at home guy. I'm not a big fan of Glen Wesley in the starting lineup at 28 teams - he played for a long time, but never really was recognized as a great defenseman league-wide. Iafrate is such a high-risk, high-reward guy, but I can definitely see him playing a decent number of games under Robinson's tutelage.
Goaltending
Durnan is one of many goalies that falls into the "pretty good" or average category here. Probably a better regular season goalie than a playoff one, but I can't see him hurting you. Osgood seems like one of the weaker backups.
Powerplay
Sittler seems weak for a first unit center. Also, who is going to go after rebounds on this team, Firsov? Jagr is awesome along the boards and along with Firsov form one of the better winger pairs here.
Weber-Pronger are solid, maybe a bit below average as first unit pointmen, but Desjardins-Suchy seem above average for 2nd unit guys.
Crosby is obviously very strong for a 2nd unit PP (why do you have Sittler over him on the first)? His wingers - not so good. Shutt is fine as a net presence, but I don't really think Gare has the offensive chops for ATD powerplay duty, especially at 28 teams. Why not put Lemaire and/or Rousseau there? I think both of them are better offensive players than Gare.
Penalty Kill
I couldn't understand why your first PK looked so awful, until I saw that your best penalty killers were on the second unit! I think Pronger has to be on the first unit to anchor the D - I don't see any of your other defensemen who are particularly strong on the PK, though Tikal, Desjardins, Weber, and Suchy are all alright. I think Pronger's so much better than the rest of your D on the PK, you just play him there and cut time out of even strength if need be.
Can either Tremblay or Rousseau take faceoffs? Regardless, I think MacKell is your best penalty killing forward and should center the first unit. Ideally, he'd have a better partner for MacKell, but I don't see one. When you picked Lemaire, you got an elite two-way third liner at even strength, but it cut down on the options for penalty killing. (Lemaire is perfectly fine as a spare PKer though).
Overall
I like: Strong scoring depth. In particular, the Crosby-Jagr, Sittler-Firsov, and Lemaire-Rousseau combos are very good. Your 1st and 3rd lines and top 4 defensemen are all great fits for each other and should be more than the sum of their parts.
I have concerns about: Shutt and Gare are pretty weak for their roles, and while I understand Shutt from a chemistry perspective, I really don't like Gare in a top 6 role or on the PP here. Your PK as currently configured is a team weakness, and while it will be helped by moving MacKell and Pronger to the first unit, it still won't be spectacular. Suchy is not used to this level of competition and may struggle on a top pairing (but he might adjust fine, it's a ?)