Mr. T
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- Feb 15, 2003
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Good good! This is a VERY promising start. A few notes though if I may, just to start.
You need to start out a BIT more coherent. I LOVE that the implication here is that you are already zonked on like 5 different prescription meds and half a suitcase of Boosh light by 11AM but you need to work up to it a bit. Start off unhinged but with SOME clarity. Then get progressively more in the bag as the inevitable debate goes on.
Also... and this is a creative choice... but I would encourage you to ALWAYS stick up for the coach, GM, etc. Appeals to authority are important because they let everyone know that you don't actually have any original ideas and rely on someone else to think for you and that you are terrified of the idea that the people in charge don't actually know what they are doing most of the time.
Again... terrific stuff. Wheelhouse, baby.
Good, good. I can gradually work in the paranoia. Build that tenuous connection between a former third line player from the mid-90's and how my local grocery store is trying to mind-control me with a specific arrangement of cereal boxes.
I have to disagree on sticking up for anyone in leadership. If I hate them, I'm standing up to "the man" (because I'm an independent rebel). In addition, I am smarter than the people in charge and I always have the correct answer that "the man" is too stupid (and weak and not masculine enough) to see. It's similar to the reason why I can only like former players - no one can refute my point of "If they were still on the Penguins, they'd be great!"
Be right back, my pills are kicking in and I need to go corner my neighbor and explain about the suspicious people that I saw or dreamed in the neighborhood yesterday.